1 00:00:00,330 --> 00:00:03,510 Now we're going to talk about writing and introduction. 2 00:00:04,410 --> 00:00:08,850 Writing an introduction, construction and analysis. 3 00:00:09,990 --> 00:00:13,380 What must you do to write a proper introduction? 4 00:00:14,240 --> 00:00:14,540 Okay. 5 00:00:14,540 --> 00:00:16,640 We're going to write an introduction together. 6 00:00:22,560 --> 00:00:27,630 So when it comes to writing an introduction, number one, you want to make sure you have the correct 7 00:00:27,630 --> 00:00:28,200 tone. 8 00:00:29,300 --> 00:00:33,860 If it's a formal or semi-formal letter, you can not have an informal tone. 9 00:00:34,960 --> 00:00:40,510 You would always start off a letter with dear sir, dear Mr. Jones, to whom it may concern you start 10 00:00:40,510 --> 00:00:41,500 off like that. 11 00:00:42,040 --> 00:00:46,840 But throughout the writing of the introduction, you start off with the correct tone. 12 00:00:48,940 --> 00:00:52,480 The only purpose with an introduction. 13 00:00:52,810 --> 00:00:56,170 The only purpose is to state the aim. 14 00:00:56,800 --> 00:00:59,050 Why are you writing the letter? 15 00:00:59,950 --> 00:01:01,870 Why are you writing the letter? 16 00:01:02,230 --> 00:01:07,060 Do not mix the discussion points into the introduction. 17 00:01:08,970 --> 00:01:11,520 Also remember sentence variety. 18 00:01:11,520 --> 00:01:14,730 You've heard me say that don't lose sight. 19 00:01:14,730 --> 00:01:18,720 Don't forget that you are taking an English test. 20 00:01:19,860 --> 00:01:25,020 So if you do basic level writing, you're going to get a basic level score. 21 00:01:26,180 --> 00:01:33,980 If you do a four of five word simple sentence, expect to get a five word simple score. 22 00:01:35,470 --> 00:01:35,650 Right. 23 00:01:35,770 --> 00:01:39,160 They are grading your level of writing that you are presenting. 24 00:01:39,670 --> 00:01:46,570 You must say the correct information and say it at a high enough level to score above a seven. 25 00:01:50,610 --> 00:01:51,240 Okay. 26 00:01:51,630 --> 00:01:56,910 So let's look at our introduction. 27 00:01:57,510 --> 00:01:57,990 Right. 28 00:01:58,530 --> 00:02:04,380 And in terms of the writing that we're going to do, you know, if you have your outline, you can use 29 00:02:04,380 --> 00:02:08,490 your own outline or you can use my outline that I have over here on the left hand side. 30 00:02:08,940 --> 00:02:14,820 But right now, everybody, what we're going to do is we're going to write the introduction. 31 00:02:15,660 --> 00:02:17,430 You have 2 minutes. 32 00:02:17,940 --> 00:02:23,190 You have 2 minutes to write this one sentence introduction, starting now. 33 00:04:33,940 --> 00:04:34,420 Okay. 34 00:04:34,420 --> 00:04:35,300 Time is up. 35 00:04:35,320 --> 00:04:36,700 Please stop writing. 36 00:04:37,360 --> 00:04:43,060 I'm going to go ahead and look at some of the examples of the introduction so that we can learn from 37 00:04:43,060 --> 00:04:45,100 them as a group. 38 00:04:53,610 --> 00:04:54,030 Okay. 39 00:04:54,030 --> 00:05:00,300 Let's go ahead and take a look at some of these examples of an introduction. 40 00:05:00,750 --> 00:05:03,990 Like I said, I'm not just trying to pull out the best ones. 41 00:05:03,990 --> 00:05:08,730 I'm trying to pull out ones that are not are poorly written also. 42 00:05:09,150 --> 00:05:17,490 And I'll point out the problems because just just like it's important to look at a well written introduction 43 00:05:17,820 --> 00:05:23,910 is is is almost equally important to look at one that's not written correctly so that you can avoid 44 00:05:23,910 --> 00:05:25,470 making the same mistakes. 45 00:05:26,810 --> 00:05:31,280 So this one is is is, is, is, is sufficiently written. 46 00:05:32,320 --> 00:05:35,840 I'm writing this letter in reference to the restaurant that I visited last week with my family. 47 00:05:37,220 --> 00:05:37,540 Right. 48 00:05:37,610 --> 00:05:38,230 It's okay. 49 00:05:38,240 --> 00:05:41,090 But really, this one repeats a lot of the language. 50 00:05:41,980 --> 00:05:45,160 It repeats a lot of the language of the question itself. 51 00:05:45,550 --> 00:05:47,020 So that's a problem. 52 00:05:47,910 --> 00:05:48,150 Right. 53 00:05:48,150 --> 00:05:54,870 When I read what I read this sentence, I don't see much difference in wording with the what the language 54 00:05:54,870 --> 00:05:56,790 from their description. 55 00:05:57,720 --> 00:05:59,040 And so that's the problem. 56 00:06:02,640 --> 00:06:04,350 This one is a problem. 57 00:06:04,350 --> 00:06:11,330 Also this second one, because I'm writing this letter as I find this restaurant authentic for the city. 58 00:06:11,370 --> 00:06:12,840 That's fine. 59 00:06:13,110 --> 00:06:20,130 But then when you're talking about the various dishes showcase or traditional lifestyle, you're describing 60 00:06:20,130 --> 00:06:21,180 the restaurant. 61 00:06:21,540 --> 00:06:25,200 That's not that's not that should not be in the introduction. 62 00:06:26,580 --> 00:06:33,390 The introduction is only about why you are writing and they tell you while you're writing, but you 63 00:06:33,390 --> 00:06:34,950 should not be describing it. 64 00:06:36,490 --> 00:06:38,920 Writing this letter to share my experience. 65 00:06:39,400 --> 00:06:42,250 My recommendation pertains to entity India. 66 00:06:42,460 --> 00:06:43,350 Period. 67 00:06:43,360 --> 00:06:44,470 Stop right there. 68 00:06:45,730 --> 00:06:46,490 Period. 69 00:06:46,510 --> 00:06:47,650 Stop. 70 00:06:48,610 --> 00:06:50,320 All this other stuff. 71 00:06:50,500 --> 00:06:52,780 Located in downtown. 72 00:06:53,990 --> 00:06:55,670 That's that's wrong. 73 00:06:58,100 --> 00:06:58,430 Right. 74 00:06:58,430 --> 00:06:59,540 That's wrong. 75 00:07:00,500 --> 00:07:02,780 You're not supposed to talk about location right now. 76 00:07:04,460 --> 00:07:05,000 Right. 77 00:07:05,450 --> 00:07:05,930 You're not. 78 00:07:05,930 --> 00:07:09,230 And they're going to they're going to drop your score for doing that kind of stuff. 79 00:07:12,410 --> 00:07:13,900 This next this final one is fine. 80 00:07:13,910 --> 00:07:16,610 This is this is the bring your attention to a restaurant. 81 00:07:16,640 --> 00:07:17,870 No problems there. 82 00:07:17,870 --> 00:07:19,160 That's a good one. 83 00:07:26,210 --> 00:07:26,690 This one. 84 00:07:26,690 --> 00:07:28,840 I like this one a lot because. 85 00:07:29,030 --> 00:07:35,970 Because of the vocabulary, this well considered letter good language is to enlighten good language. 86 00:07:35,990 --> 00:07:39,290 The readers of your newspaper that I know, we're writing to it. 87 00:07:39,320 --> 00:07:41,070 We're writing it to a newspaper. 88 00:07:41,090 --> 00:07:46,520 Great job with regards to good language, a marvelous meal. 89 00:07:46,760 --> 00:07:51,470 Good language that I had in a countryside restaurant. 90 00:07:52,520 --> 00:07:53,090 Right. 91 00:07:54,320 --> 00:07:55,010 That's a good. 92 00:07:55,760 --> 00:08:03,110 So I want you to really know the difference between the previous one that I said was good and this one 93 00:08:03,110 --> 00:08:04,550 that I'm saying is better. 94 00:08:05,630 --> 00:08:05,910 Right. 95 00:08:05,930 --> 00:08:07,700 A lot of times people don't understand. 96 00:08:07,700 --> 00:08:09,650 You could write something correctly. 97 00:08:10,450 --> 00:08:13,690 But the level of their differences in level of English. 98 00:08:14,830 --> 00:08:19,180 I'm writing to you about my recent culinary experience that I have had at Lucky's. 99 00:08:19,540 --> 00:08:24,790 I'm hopeful you will show with your share with your readers so that they are able to take. 100 00:08:26,050 --> 00:08:27,370 There are some grammar mistakes. 101 00:08:27,370 --> 00:08:29,350 You know, you don't want to make grammar mistakes. 102 00:08:31,750 --> 00:08:32,180 Comma. 103 00:08:32,230 --> 00:08:35,740 So they're able to make an informed decision. 104 00:08:39,410 --> 00:08:40,700 Dear sir. 105 00:08:40,700 --> 00:08:42,530 Madam, I live in North Delhi. 106 00:08:43,100 --> 00:08:45,560 I have four members of my family. 107 00:08:45,590 --> 00:08:46,880 Well, what does all this? 108 00:08:48,660 --> 00:08:51,300 Why are somebody why are you describing your family? 109 00:08:55,020 --> 00:08:55,190 What? 110 00:08:56,910 --> 00:08:57,330 All right? 111 00:08:57,330 --> 00:08:57,660 Yeah. 112 00:08:57,690 --> 00:08:58,830 No, no, no. 113 00:08:59,800 --> 00:09:00,580 No. 114 00:09:00,850 --> 00:09:03,400 No, no, no, no, no, no. 115 00:09:04,330 --> 00:09:04,690 All right. 116 00:09:04,870 --> 00:09:06,730 This is not the purpose. 117 00:09:07,910 --> 00:09:08,370 Right. 118 00:09:08,420 --> 00:09:15,200 If you were writing this if I were reading this letter and you wrote this stuff about who your father 119 00:09:15,200 --> 00:09:19,130 is and who your mother is and who your brother and sister are, what? 120 00:09:19,130 --> 00:09:20,020 I'm going to read this. 121 00:09:20,030 --> 00:09:20,390 What are you. 122 00:09:20,420 --> 00:09:22,490 What is this person talking about? 123 00:09:24,540 --> 00:09:25,860 It's nice. 124 00:09:26,370 --> 00:09:28,680 But the purpose of writing is not there. 125 00:09:29,880 --> 00:09:32,190 This letter in regards my new visit to a local restaurant. 126 00:09:32,190 --> 00:09:34,800 I am surprised, happy and interested to share. 127 00:09:36,210 --> 00:09:37,080 Share. 128 00:09:38,040 --> 00:09:43,370 Not with share my experience or share the experience of my visit. 129 00:09:43,380 --> 00:09:44,250 That's a good one. 130 00:09:45,550 --> 00:09:48,250 It's not better than this first one, but it's good. 131 00:09:51,140 --> 00:09:53,540 Does anybody see the problem with this last one? 132 00:09:54,840 --> 00:09:59,100 This is the bringing to your notice that me and my family have visited a great restaurant near our town, 133 00:09:59,100 --> 00:10:00,780 about ten kilometers from our home. 134 00:10:01,780 --> 00:10:01,950 What's. 135 00:10:02,020 --> 00:10:03,550 What's wrong with this last one? 136 00:10:04,660 --> 00:10:06,400 They might know what's wrong with that last one. 137 00:10:14,060 --> 00:10:15,470 What's wrong with that last one? 138 00:10:20,050 --> 00:10:20,920 Location. 139 00:10:20,920 --> 00:10:21,850 Exactly. 140 00:10:22,890 --> 00:10:23,710 Exactly. 141 00:10:23,730 --> 00:10:24,330 Talking. 142 00:10:24,360 --> 00:10:27,780 Talking about the location does not belong. 143 00:10:30,210 --> 00:10:30,750 Right. 144 00:10:30,780 --> 00:10:32,940 Talking about the location does not belong. 145 00:10:32,970 --> 00:10:34,110 That's the problem. 146 00:10:43,270 --> 00:10:43,930 This next one. 147 00:10:43,930 --> 00:10:45,220 Actually, I like to. 148 00:10:46,360 --> 00:10:49,180 I think it's a I think it's a well structured sentence. 149 00:10:49,180 --> 00:10:54,160 Except for except for he messed up. 150 00:10:54,850 --> 00:10:58,180 I like I like this being a flu food blogger. 151 00:10:58,480 --> 00:10:59,710 Great language. 152 00:11:01,470 --> 00:11:05,040 I would like to draw your attention towards a new restaurant. 153 00:11:06,120 --> 00:11:07,590 A new restaurant. 154 00:11:08,040 --> 00:11:12,480 All of this is wrong that is residing in the heart of the city. 155 00:11:12,780 --> 00:11:15,390 No, you're not talking about location. 156 00:11:17,170 --> 00:11:24,010 I would like to draw your attention towards a new restaurant that my family and I had a great dining 157 00:11:24,010 --> 00:11:25,540 experience, period. 158 00:11:28,700 --> 00:11:32,360 I am writing to describe about my experience in the downtown area. 159 00:11:33,320 --> 00:11:36,290 There is a new local Thai restaurant. 160 00:11:36,290 --> 00:11:39,140 I really had a gala town of what that means. 161 00:11:39,620 --> 00:11:41,420 A gala time with my family. 162 00:11:42,290 --> 00:11:44,870 Again, we're not talking about location. 163 00:11:45,970 --> 00:11:49,050 So you can see, right? 164 00:11:49,060 --> 00:11:50,590 You guys can see. 165 00:11:51,390 --> 00:11:52,140 There. 166 00:11:53,950 --> 00:12:01,960 You know, when you're writing, you can see that there are mistakes that are made that a lot of you 167 00:12:01,960 --> 00:12:08,200 may not recognize and understand that you are making these mistakes. 168 00:12:09,460 --> 00:12:10,060 Right. 169 00:12:10,090 --> 00:12:12,010 When you write an introduction. 170 00:12:12,880 --> 00:12:14,590 When you write an introduction. 171 00:12:15,720 --> 00:12:21,870 You only write the introduction based on the purpose of why you are writing. 172 00:12:23,240 --> 00:12:25,040 The purpose of why you are writing. 173 00:12:27,980 --> 00:12:28,460 All right. 174 00:12:30,400 --> 00:12:31,660 No, no, no, no. 175 00:12:31,840 --> 00:12:32,050 No. 176 00:12:32,050 --> 00:12:33,940 There's no time for doing a rewrite. 177 00:12:34,900 --> 00:12:36,280 You dirty. 178 00:12:36,430 --> 00:12:37,720 You learned the lesson. 179 00:12:37,720 --> 00:12:39,340 You've learned the lesson. 180 00:12:40,410 --> 00:12:40,980 Right. 181 00:12:41,190 --> 00:12:42,990 You learn what to do and what not to do. 182 00:12:42,990 --> 00:12:45,090 But we this is we have a limited time. 183 00:12:45,270 --> 00:12:46,800 I'm not going to do a rewrites. 184 00:12:51,250 --> 00:12:51,520 Here. 185 00:12:51,520 --> 00:12:53,410 You can look at some of my examples. 186 00:12:54,730 --> 00:12:55,900 Of an introduction. 187 00:12:59,520 --> 00:13:05,160 My family and I recently dined pleasurably at the African World Eatery, a Detroit restaurant, and 188 00:13:05,160 --> 00:13:08,790 I would like to share the high points of our experience. 189 00:13:09,810 --> 00:13:14,490 I mentioned a Detroit restaurant because I'm saying that instead of saying local restaurant. 190 00:13:16,240 --> 00:13:16,770 Okay. 191 00:13:18,680 --> 00:13:23,030 Your newspaper desires feedback regarding Detroit restaurants local restaurants. 192 00:13:23,030 --> 00:13:28,310 Therefore, please find below the high points of my family's dining experience at the African World 193 00:13:28,310 --> 00:13:28,940 Eatery. 194 00:13:30,670 --> 00:13:36,070 Third example, on Tuesday, July 11th, my family and I visited the African World Eatery, a Detroit 195 00:13:36,070 --> 00:13:40,480 grill and bar, and I wanted to share our experience at this establishment. 196 00:13:42,170 --> 00:13:42,710 Right. 197 00:13:43,370 --> 00:13:49,430 So there I gave you three different examples of my introduction. 198 00:13:50,300 --> 00:13:55,130 Right here I say a deer deer free press editor because I'm writing to the editor. 199 00:13:55,760 --> 00:14:00,800 I could also say, Dear Sir, Madam, I could also put a specific name. 200 00:14:00,800 --> 00:14:02,930 Dear Mr. Jones, Editor in Chief. 201 00:14:04,510 --> 00:14:06,140 All of those would be just fine.