1 00:00:00,580 --> 00:00:07,030 Are there any questions before I keep going about anything that I've said, about anything that I've 2 00:00:07,030 --> 00:00:10,840 said so far in terms of attacking the rubric? 3 00:00:11,570 --> 00:00:14,660 If there are no questions about that, I'm going to keep going forward. 4 00:00:15,320 --> 00:00:19,290 But you really want to make sure that you understand how to attack the rubric. 5 00:00:19,310 --> 00:00:20,780 That's really, really important. 6 00:00:20,810 --> 00:00:26,030 How do students ruin their score before they even start to write? 7 00:00:26,120 --> 00:00:34,310 Very often this happens by a failure to understand the question or to do a proper outline. 8 00:00:34,610 --> 00:00:44,990 Maybe about 50% of the students actually seriously understand the value of those first two steps, properly 9 00:00:44,990 --> 00:00:50,960 analyzing a question so you know how to answer it and then properly being able to outline the question. 10 00:00:51,170 --> 00:00:56,480 Those first two steps set up everything else for getting a great score. 11 00:00:59,240 --> 00:01:00,260 So very often. 12 00:01:00,260 --> 00:01:00,740 We'll see. 13 00:01:00,770 --> 00:01:01,370 We'll see. 14 00:01:01,370 --> 00:01:03,020 Poor question analysis. 15 00:01:06,150 --> 00:01:13,590 Like here we have four questions and each one of these four questions are on the same topic. 16 00:01:14,670 --> 00:01:19,710 Question number one says, although there is a lot of translation software available, learning the 17 00:01:19,710 --> 00:01:21,900 language still could be advantageous. 18 00:01:21,900 --> 00:01:23,860 To what extent do you agree or disagree? 19 00:01:23,880 --> 00:01:26,340 That's that first question. 20 00:01:26,670 --> 00:01:32,250 Question to say, as people are using a lot of online language translation apps, do the benefits of 21 00:01:32,250 --> 00:01:34,230 this outweigh the disadvantages? 22 00:01:34,440 --> 00:01:35,850 Same topic. 23 00:01:36,860 --> 00:01:38,270 Different type of question. 24 00:01:38,930 --> 00:01:44,330 Number three says nowadays it is possible to use computers and mobile phones for automatic language 25 00:01:44,330 --> 00:01:48,560 translation and there is no need for human translators and interpreters. 26 00:01:48,590 --> 00:01:50,150 Do you agree or disagree? 27 00:01:50,690 --> 00:01:55,670 And number four says some people prefer to use language translation apps to aid them at work. 28 00:01:55,790 --> 00:01:58,970 Others prefer to learn the language themselves for work purposes. 29 00:01:59,120 --> 00:02:01,700 Discuss both views and give your opinion. 30 00:02:02,570 --> 00:02:06,140 Each one of these questions is on the same topic. 31 00:02:07,350 --> 00:02:10,110 Of language translation applications. 32 00:02:10,680 --> 00:02:14,970 But you have to be able to answer each one of these types of questions. 33 00:02:14,970 --> 00:02:21,960 You have to be able to answer the essay within the context of the question. 34 00:02:22,650 --> 00:02:30,750 You have to know the difference between to what extent the outweigh normal, agreed, disagree and discussing 35 00:02:30,750 --> 00:02:33,570 both discussing both views. 36 00:02:34,380 --> 00:02:40,530 Very often what happens is a student will read a question and they'll say, okay, so they're talking 37 00:02:40,530 --> 00:02:42,480 about language translation apps. 38 00:02:42,720 --> 00:02:49,800 So I'm going to write an essay about language translation apps and they write about the topic and they 39 00:02:49,800 --> 00:02:51,270 don't answer the question. 40 00:02:51,540 --> 00:02:58,440 That very often leads to scores that are below a 6.5, definitely below a seven. 41 00:03:03,980 --> 00:03:08,000 And then, of course, you have poor outlining which can be a problem. 42 00:03:10,160 --> 00:03:10,320 Right. 43 00:03:10,360 --> 00:03:16,570 So here it says, every year we get reports of dwindling natural resources on Earth. 44 00:03:16,600 --> 00:03:18,910 Choose one resource should be one resource. 45 00:03:19,060 --> 00:03:24,430 Choose one resource and explain why you would want why you would choose to save that resource. 46 00:03:24,460 --> 00:03:26,170 What's wrong with this outline? 47 00:03:26,200 --> 00:03:28,360 Can anybody tell me what's wrong with this outline? 48 00:03:28,960 --> 00:03:29,440 Right. 49 00:03:29,440 --> 00:03:31,060 If you know what's wrong with the outline. 50 00:03:31,300 --> 00:03:33,040 Type it in the chat box, please. 51 00:03:35,420 --> 00:03:38,290 Who can identify what is wrong with this outline. 52 00:03:38,300 --> 00:03:39,350 There's a problem. 53 00:03:40,790 --> 00:03:45,020 You should be able to quickly identify what's wrong with the outline. 54 00:03:45,770 --> 00:03:46,520 No. 55 00:03:47,500 --> 00:03:49,210 Life benefits are fine. 56 00:03:50,280 --> 00:03:51,600 That's absolutely fine. 57 00:03:52,080 --> 00:03:55,530 As a native speaker, I understand that perfectly. 58 00:03:56,010 --> 00:03:57,690 No one knows what's wrong. 59 00:03:58,790 --> 00:04:00,290 There is no paragraph. 60 00:04:00,980 --> 00:04:02,570 So the paragraph is not cohesive. 61 00:04:03,110 --> 00:04:04,660 No resource was mentioned? 62 00:04:04,670 --> 00:04:05,360 No. 63 00:04:06,950 --> 00:04:07,790 Who was that? 64 00:04:08,060 --> 00:04:08,480 Maybe. 65 00:04:08,480 --> 00:04:09,140 Sharma? 66 00:04:09,170 --> 00:04:09,670 No. 67 00:04:10,040 --> 00:04:10,610 So. 68 00:04:13,530 --> 00:04:17,880 We know the resource because the person said forest. 69 00:04:18,180 --> 00:04:20,220 So we know the resource they want to save. 70 00:04:20,220 --> 00:04:21,690 They want to save forest. 71 00:04:22,920 --> 00:04:28,080 The problem is that they don't have a controlling idea. 72 00:04:28,910 --> 00:04:30,980 For their first body paragraph. 73 00:04:32,000 --> 00:04:38,630 They have their choice forced and their controlling idea of forest as the as the as the as the controlling 74 00:04:38,630 --> 00:04:39,500 idea of their choice. 75 00:04:39,500 --> 00:04:42,680 And controlling idea number two is fine. 76 00:04:42,710 --> 00:04:49,100 Number two is absolutely fine because their controlling ideas, life benefits, that's the reason why 77 00:04:49,100 --> 00:04:52,510 they that's one reason why they want to save the forest. 78 00:04:52,520 --> 00:04:57,380 This first one does not state a reason why they want to save the forest. 79 00:04:57,380 --> 00:04:59,450 There is no controlling idea. 80 00:04:59,600 --> 00:05:04,910 And so that's something that you should have seen automatically, that there's a missing controlling 81 00:05:04,910 --> 00:05:05,660 idea. 82 00:05:06,260 --> 00:05:12,200 So what this person is about to do is they're about to write an incoherent paragraph. 83 00:05:13,800 --> 00:05:16,560 And it's that easy, right? 84 00:05:16,770 --> 00:05:22,260 They'll have one body paragraph that's coherent and that is actually answering the question. 85 00:05:22,500 --> 00:05:29,970 And then they have this other body paragraph because of a bad topic sentence, they don't have any coherence. 86 00:05:30,300 --> 00:05:34,050 You see that the two most important sentences in a whole essay. 87 00:05:34,290 --> 00:05:39,120 Number one, the thesis statement because it controls the entire essay. 88 00:05:39,750 --> 00:05:44,340 And number two, the topic sentences because they control each body paragraph. 89 00:05:45,030 --> 00:05:52,290 If you can't write a top thesis statement correctly, or if you can't write a topic sentence correctly, 90 00:05:52,290 --> 00:05:55,770 you will have coherence and cohesion problems. 91 00:05:56,340 --> 00:05:57,280 Is that simple? 92 00:05:57,310 --> 00:05:57,590 Yeah. 93 00:05:57,600 --> 00:05:57,990 Of course. 94 00:05:57,990 --> 00:06:02,820 The first one could be something like avoid global warming, but it's missing a controlling idea. 95 00:06:03,100 --> 00:06:03,400 Right. 96 00:06:03,420 --> 00:06:05,370 There's no controlling idea for that first one. 97 00:06:05,370 --> 00:06:07,290 And that's what everybody should have seen. 98 00:06:08,040 --> 00:06:09,600 I think one person saw it. 99 00:06:10,350 --> 00:06:11,100 That's all. 100 00:06:18,260 --> 00:06:18,590 Right. 101 00:06:18,590 --> 00:06:24,350 So again, we have a this is an example of poor outlining. 102 00:06:25,010 --> 00:06:30,800 And it doesn't matter matter whether you do it on paper and write it down or if you try to keep it in 103 00:06:30,800 --> 00:06:33,140 your head, which which I never suggest you do. 104 00:06:33,140 --> 00:06:35,300 I don't know why people try to keep an outline in their head. 105 00:06:35,300 --> 00:06:39,290 It just gives you more to think about and remember it interferes with good writing. 106 00:06:39,770 --> 00:06:41,000 But what's wrong here? 107 00:06:41,000 --> 00:06:42,050 What's the problem here? 108 00:06:42,130 --> 00:06:43,930 Why is this outline wrong? 109 00:06:43,940 --> 00:06:45,650 Who knows why the outline is wrong? 110 00:06:45,650 --> 00:06:49,190 See, if we can't answer this question, then we have a problem. 111 00:06:49,190 --> 00:06:49,460 All right. 112 00:06:49,460 --> 00:06:52,610 If you understand writing, you should be able to see why this is wrong. 113 00:06:52,820 --> 00:06:54,740 Does anybody know what's the problem here? 114 00:06:55,340 --> 00:06:56,750 No one knows. 115 00:06:58,850 --> 00:07:01,700 Ezra Thank you, Ezra. 116 00:07:01,850 --> 00:07:02,330 Thank you. 117 00:07:02,330 --> 00:07:03,260 Thank you, thank you. 118 00:07:03,260 --> 00:07:08,690 Ezra The question does not ask why it's happening. 119 00:07:08,690 --> 00:07:13,340 Where does this question tell you to explain why it's happening? 120 00:07:14,090 --> 00:07:17,420 You should see that immediately that that's a problem. 121 00:07:18,890 --> 00:07:21,470 Number two is a reason why to save it. 122 00:07:22,640 --> 00:07:26,270 But the question doesn't ask why it's happening, right? 123 00:07:26,300 --> 00:07:28,370 It doesn't ask why it's happening. 124 00:07:28,700 --> 00:07:37,400 This is an example, everybody of poor progression because the answering of the essay stops. 125 00:07:37,970 --> 00:07:41,670 None of this paragraph is answering the question. 126 00:07:41,690 --> 00:07:47,900 And very often students go into the essay, go into the exam, and then they they'll they'll write me 127 00:07:47,900 --> 00:07:50,150 and say, I did a great job on my essay. 128 00:07:50,150 --> 00:07:52,450 And I'll say, Well, what did you talk about in your essay? 129 00:07:52,460 --> 00:07:54,320 And they'll show me something like this. 130 00:07:54,710 --> 00:08:00,140 Then I'll say, Well, one of your body paragraphs is completely wrong, and they're in shock and don't 131 00:08:00,140 --> 00:08:04,190 realize, you know, these are these are mistakes that you make. 132 00:08:04,250 --> 00:08:08,750 The the the question analysis part is extremely important. 133 00:08:09,320 --> 00:08:11,690 Outlining is extremely important. 134 00:08:11,690 --> 00:08:18,470 Students that do those first two steps very, very well always do a great job on the exam. 135 00:08:18,680 --> 00:08:19,010 Right. 136 00:08:19,010 --> 00:08:21,170 They always do a great job on the exam. 137 00:08:21,500 --> 00:08:22,070 But yeah. 138 00:08:22,100 --> 00:08:22,520 As follows. 139 00:08:22,520 --> 00:08:22,950 Right. 140 00:08:22,970 --> 00:08:24,740 Question doesn't ask about why it's happening. 141 00:08:24,740 --> 00:08:26,210 So why are you talking about it? 142 00:08:26,540 --> 00:08:28,940 You have to stay inside the box of the question.